I don’t know where I got this from, but it’s extremely useful, so I thought it would be good to share.
Replace words that tell with words that
Remove interpretation, let action speak for itself.
verb constructions with active.
Identify, then remove or translate
Get specific. Replace general, informational language with rich
narrative summary full of specific and meaningful images.
Show them in action
Show them using key skills, attitudes, hobbies etc
Show other characters’ reactions
Make use of setting
hints about backstory
To sum up: Craft your character introductions to tell
us what’s most important about that person.
Ann Marie Thomas is the author of
three medieval history books, a surprisingly cheerful poetry collection about
her 2010 stroke, and the science fiction series Flight of the Kestrel. Book one,
Intruders, is out now. Follow her at http://eepurl.com/bbOsyz